My
grandmother told me about the time when Argus hit Aunt Pearl. My grandmother said, “Pearl called me one day
on the telephone crying, I asked her what was wrong. She said, ‘He, he…’ and before she could get
the words out I hung up the phone and went over there with Frank Junior. Frank Junior knocked on the door and when
Argus cracked that door open, Frank Junior beat the hell out him! Pearl was in the background crying and
pleading for Frank Junior to stop. I
cheered him on: ‘You better not stop, beat him!
Beat him! Beat the hell out of
him!’ Frank Junior beat him all
throughout that apartment. Frank Junior
put one hell of a whopping on him.”
A step by step guide to writing a book or short story, Entertainment News and Excerpts from the book, Evergreen Uprooted, Memoirs of Secret by Author N.A.Z. Pankey
Thursday, December 6, 2012
EVERGREEN UPROOTED, Memoirs of Secret (Ch. 5 Excerpt)
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Wednesday, December 5, 2012
CREATE STRUCTURE IN YOUR WRITING
CREATE STRUCTURE IN YOUR WRITING
The thing about Lego bricks is that you can build just about anything you can imagine–if you’re patient enough. People have built whole cities out of Lego bricks. The problem is that you have to figure out yourself how to put the things together. While there might be instructions on how to build a specific kind of Lego castle, there are no instructions on how you can build the castle that exists in your own imagination.David goes on to suggest this exercise, which I share with you below. (A sidenote: What’s particularly amusing about it is that he is the writer of the episode “The Trouble with Tribbles” from Star Trek: The Original Series, which is, in my opinion, one of the best Star Trek episodes ever.)
Planning your story is the same experience. You have a sense of what you want it to be, how you want the pieces to fit together, but actually getting this brick to fit next to that one…. Pretty soon, you start to wonder how the hell Arthur C. Clarke and Larry Niven and Frederik Pohl and Richard Matheson and Jack Finney and Anne McCaffrey and C.J. Cherryh and Connie Willis can make it look so easy.
Get yourself a stack of index cards. Write a one-line synopsis of each specific scene that you think should be in your story, one scene per card. Don’t worry about writing them down in any specific order. Just write them down as fast as you think of them:
But this isn’t enough for a complete story. You need a second plot line too, something to complicate the first one:
- Lt. Uhura brings a tribble aboard the Enterprise.
- Lt. Uhura first gets the tribble from a local merchant.
- Uhura’s tribble has a litter of little tribbles.
- Scotty discovers tribbles in the air vents.
- Kirk finds a tribble on his captain’s chair.
- Kirk and Spock beam over to the space station. Kirk opens up the storage compartments and lots of tribbles fall down on his head.
- The Klingons want shore leave, but what they really want is … to disrupt the plan for Sherman’s Planet.
- The Klingons are on the speace station. A barroom brawl breaks out.
- Kirk investigates the fight. He bawls out Scotty and restricts him to quarters. Scotty is glad for the chance to read his technical manuals.
- The plan for Sherman’s Planet is that Earth will plant a new grain. If nothing earthlike will grow, the Klingons get the planet.
- The Klingons are here to poison the grain.
- The tribbles eat the poisoned grain, reproduce like crazy and fall on Kirk’s head, but McCoy discovers that they’re dying.
Now, take all these separate cards and shuffle them together and start laying them out on the kitchen table in the order you think they should go. First organize each plot line in its own thread. Then you can go back and forth between separate threads, picking up the next appropriate scene from each.
When you have all the cards laid out in order, go through them as if you’re reading a comic book or a storyboard and see if they read like a story. Is this a logical or inevitable progression of events? If it isn’t, start moving the cards around–no, this one needs to go before that one; this scene has to follow that scene, this group goes here, not there. Oops, I need a scene to fill in between this one and that one, I need another scene to foreshadow.
Keep doing this–adding, cutting, rearranging–until you think you have all the scenes the story needs in an order that works.
What you will discover is that everything is connected to everything else. As the various pieces of the story start fitting together, they affect each other; so you will have to make continual adjustments as you go.
Some people like to do their outlining on a computer, but the actual physical act of writing scene synopses down on cards and shuffling them around on the kitchen table is still one of the best ways to get a sense of the rhythms of story structure, because it allows you to treat scenes as units.
A story is a set of motivational units, strung like pearls on a string. Every scene must serve a specific purpose. Every scene should propel the story forward. Every scene must make the next scene inevitable.So what do you think–is this sound advice? For my money, I say it is. I especially like what David has to say about treating each scene as a “motivational unit” and being able to see, from a visual perspective, those scenes that don’t move the story along, and therefore are necessary to cut.
Do you employ this technique, or something similar, when creating a structure for your novel or story? Or do you disagree entirely with this approach? I’d love to hear about your own methods.
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Tuesday, December 4, 2012
EVERGREEN UPROOTED, Memoirs of Secret (Ch. 4 Excerpt)
Buck was
brown-skinned, tall, and very skinny. He
had extra-long legs, a narrow face, big bubba lips, and crater-holes on his
cheeks from shaving. The first time
Mommy introduced him to me, she bragged, “Buck is no joke. I feel safe around him because he told me
stories about how he fought in the war, and he knows how to handle guns. Everyone on the block is scared of him, and
all the women on the block are jealous of our relationship, even his family.”
That first
time I met Buck I looked closely, trying to see what Mommy saw in him. He had dark black stains on his lips from
smoking cigarettes, and yellow teeth, and a southern accent. He had big hands and big feet. He was wearing straight-legged Lee jeans with
the permanent crease down the middle, and a plaid short-sleeve button-down
shirt. His clothes looked neat and
clean, and his Afro was short and sharp.
He looked at me and reached in his pocket and pulled out a small brown paper
bag. I wondered what was in that bag. “Here.”
He handed it to me and smiled.
“Thank you,
what is it?”
“Why don’t
you open it and see?”
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Monday, December 3, 2012
INSIDE THE MIND OF YOUR YOUNG ADULT READER
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INSIDE THE MIND OF YOUR YOUNG ADULT READER
There’s something crucial that I want you to remember about YA, and that’s the all-consuming nature of being a teenager. It’s that sense of possibility. That feeling of your heart welling so big it could explode. It used to happen for me when I was driving around my hometown, late at night, in my wizard-purple Ford Taurus (before the hip redesign, thankyouverymuch) and the perfect song would come on the radio. Everything felt so big and so important in that moment, like all the parts of the universe had finally—yet fleetingly—clicked into place.
Remember the electricity of adolescence? You have your first love, your first heartbreak, your first truly selfless act, your first betrayal, your first seriously bad decision, your first moment of profound pride, the first time you’re a hero. These milestones space out as we age, but when you’re a teenager, they all happen in very close proximity to one another.
The decisions you’re making feel like they will have ramifications forever. You feel by turns invincible and vulnerable, inconsequential and permanent. All of these experiences are ones you’re having for the very first time, and you’re packed into a group with hundreds of other teens who feel the exact same way (though they hardly ever let on). So you’re also isolated and craving community, which is why you search for a book that feels like it’s written just for you.
It’s, in a word, intense.
I like to quote a YA-before-it-was-YA novel, The Perks of Being a Wallflower, by Stephen Chbosky, which was published in 1999 for the adult market (my, how times have changed). In one scene, his teen characters go through a tunnel and emerge into a beautiful view of city lights. The narrator, Charlie, says:
Teens feel everything very intensely, and two things in particular: An interest in romance and darkness. If you’ve been in the teen section of a bookstore recently, you’ll know what I mean. It seems as if every cover greets you with the same combination of a pouting girl, a brooding boy, and the colors purple and black.
Paranormal and dystopian are such forces in the marketplace that I’m dedicating this entire section to explaining them. First, the discouraging fact: These genres are on the wane, so I wouldn’t dive into them right now if I were you. A lot of publishers are committed to paranormal and dystopian trilogies through 2014 and even 2015, and they’re not signing up many new projects in these veins.
A lot of readers and writers (and yes, editors and agents) are getting tired of these genres and wondering why they took off with such velocity in the first place. When I think about teen readers and their mindset, the reasons become clear.
Romantic relationships are a huge obsession for teens. Most teens, however, lack real-life romantic experience. Teen boys inviting you over to play Xbox and teen girls texting through dinner dates at The Cheesecake Factory must leave a lot to be desired. Since there aren’t many dashing Edward Cullens willing to die on the fangs of vampires for today’s teen girls, these hungry readers turn to fiction to flesh out their rich fantasy lives.
Teens also don’t often feel empowered. Their lives can seem like a track from AP classes to test prep to sports to volunteer work and the message they hear is: If you get off this track, fail the SATs, or don’t get into the right college, then the rest of your life is in jeopardy. They feel trapped and helpless. Most want control, so the kick-butt aspect of paranormal (vampire slaying, zombie battles, etc.) is attractive.
Finally, teens are exploring the dark side of their personalities around the time they hit fourteen or fifteen. They get interested in suicide and serial killers and other darker shades of humanity. Death-related worlds and characters help them explore that through fiction. One of the biggest hits of the last five years is Jay Asher’s Thirteen Reasons Why, a book about one girl’s suicide and the reasons behind it.
Some teens start to see the darker underbelly of life during high school—a friend starts cutting, someone gets pregnant, a classmate dies—and they use fiction to explore these issues in a safe way. The recent trend toward dystopian is an extension of this, and a way of dealing with the anxieties of living in a world full of economic depression, war, and terrorism.
When you think about your teen readers, keep the above in mind. Whether your romance is paranormal or not, know that your (mostly female, per the previous chapter) audience craves stories about crushes and relationships. Even if your story doesn’t have a darker shade to it, acknowledge that your readers are dealing with a complex world where everything isn’t always unicorns and rainbows.
I would not counsel you to include one of the stock paranormal elements in your manuscript—vampires, werewolves, fallen angels, demons, mermaids, Greek mythology, zombies—because of overcrowding on the shelves and general fatigue. If you simply have to do paranormal, find a unique twist or uncover an underutilized mythology or creature. A fantastic new take on “angels,” for example, is Laini Taylor’s The Daughter of Smoke and Bone.
On the other hand, if you can, do try and include some kind of love interest. You don’t have to write an all-out romance, but you’ll be missing a huge potential selling point if you don’t acknowledge this part of your readers’ lives. As you will soon see, the romantic element in your story can range from an unrequited crush to falling deeply in love.
Themes and Big Ideas in Young Adult
When you know the teen experience and can place yourself in your target readers’ experience, you’re that much more likely to write a book that resonates with them on a deeper, thematic level.
Let’s go to the shelves for a look at how YA writers have incorporated theme into their teen characters’ narratives. First up is McLean from Sarah Dessen’s What Happened to Goodbye. She moves around the country with her restaurant consultant father, trying on new names and personalities in each town. As she lands in a new spot, she contemplates her predicament:
Next up is teen-mindset-master John Green and his book Paper Towns. In it, an earnest teen boy, Quentin, or Q for short, falls for a hipster named Margo Roth Spiegelman, a teen so disillusioned with her suburban life that she runs away. Being the stand-up (lovesick) guy, Q spends the rest of the book trying to save Margo from herself.
A lot of teens see the world or society and want to change it. Here, Margo speaks about her claustrophobic Florida town:
INSIDE THE MIND OF YOUR YOUNG ADULT READER
There’s something crucial that I want you to remember about YA, and that’s the all-consuming nature of being a teenager. It’s that sense of possibility. That feeling of your heart welling so big it could explode. It used to happen for me when I was driving around my hometown, late at night, in my wizard-purple Ford Taurus (before the hip redesign, thankyouverymuch) and the perfect song would come on the radio. Everything felt so big and so important in that moment, like all the parts of the universe had finally—yet fleetingly—clicked into place.
Remember the electricity of adolescence? You have your first love, your first heartbreak, your first truly selfless act, your first betrayal, your first seriously bad decision, your first moment of profound pride, the first time you’re a hero. These milestones space out as we age, but when you’re a teenager, they all happen in very close proximity to one another.
The decisions you’re making feel like they will have ramifications forever. You feel by turns invincible and vulnerable, inconsequential and permanent. All of these experiences are ones you’re having for the very first time, and you’re packed into a group with hundreds of other teens who feel the exact same way (though they hardly ever let on). So you’re also isolated and craving community, which is why you search for a book that feels like it’s written just for you.
It’s, in a word, intense.
I like to quote a YA-before-it-was-YA novel, The Perks of Being a Wallflower, by Stephen Chbosky, which was published in 1999 for the adult market (my, how times have changed). In one scene, his teen characters go through a tunnel and emerge into a beautiful view of city lights. The narrator, Charlie, says:
“And in that moment, I swear we were infinite.”Romance and Darkness
Teens feel everything very intensely, and two things in particular: An interest in romance and darkness. If you’ve been in the teen section of a bookstore recently, you’ll know what I mean. It seems as if every cover greets you with the same combination of a pouting girl, a brooding boy, and the colors purple and black.
Paranormal and dystopian are such forces in the marketplace that I’m dedicating this entire section to explaining them. First, the discouraging fact: These genres are on the wane, so I wouldn’t dive into them right now if I were you. A lot of publishers are committed to paranormal and dystopian trilogies through 2014 and even 2015, and they’re not signing up many new projects in these veins.
A lot of readers and writers (and yes, editors and agents) are getting tired of these genres and wondering why they took off with such velocity in the first place. When I think about teen readers and their mindset, the reasons become clear.
Romantic relationships are a huge obsession for teens. Most teens, however, lack real-life romantic experience. Teen boys inviting you over to play Xbox and teen girls texting through dinner dates at The Cheesecake Factory must leave a lot to be desired. Since there aren’t many dashing Edward Cullens willing to die on the fangs of vampires for today’s teen girls, these hungry readers turn to fiction to flesh out their rich fantasy lives.
Teens also don’t often feel empowered. Their lives can seem like a track from AP classes to test prep to sports to volunteer work and the message they hear is: If you get off this track, fail the SATs, or don’t get into the right college, then the rest of your life is in jeopardy. They feel trapped and helpless. Most want control, so the kick-butt aspect of paranormal (vampire slaying, zombie battles, etc.) is attractive.
Finally, teens are exploring the dark side of their personalities around the time they hit fourteen or fifteen. They get interested in suicide and serial killers and other darker shades of humanity. Death-related worlds and characters help them explore that through fiction. One of the biggest hits of the last five years is Jay Asher’s Thirteen Reasons Why, a book about one girl’s suicide and the reasons behind it.
Some teens start to see the darker underbelly of life during high school—a friend starts cutting, someone gets pregnant, a classmate dies—and they use fiction to explore these issues in a safe way. The recent trend toward dystopian is an extension of this, and a way of dealing with the anxieties of living in a world full of economic depression, war, and terrorism.
When you think about your teen readers, keep the above in mind. Whether your romance is paranormal or not, know that your (mostly female, per the previous chapter) audience craves stories about crushes and relationships. Even if your story doesn’t have a darker shade to it, acknowledge that your readers are dealing with a complex world where everything isn’t always unicorns and rainbows.
I would not counsel you to include one of the stock paranormal elements in your manuscript—vampires, werewolves, fallen angels, demons, mermaids, Greek mythology, zombies—because of overcrowding on the shelves and general fatigue. If you simply have to do paranormal, find a unique twist or uncover an underutilized mythology or creature. A fantastic new take on “angels,” for example, is Laini Taylor’s The Daughter of Smoke and Bone.
On the other hand, if you can, do try and include some kind of love interest. You don’t have to write an all-out romance, but you’ll be missing a huge potential selling point if you don’t acknowledge this part of your readers’ lives. As you will soon see, the romantic element in your story can range from an unrequited crush to falling deeply in love.
Themes and Big Ideas in Young Adult
When you know the teen experience and can place yourself in your target readers’ experience, you’re that much more likely to write a book that resonates with them on a deeper, thematic level.
Let’s go to the shelves for a look at how YA writers have incorporated theme into their teen characters’ narratives. First up is McLean from Sarah Dessen’s What Happened to Goodbye. She moves around the country with her restaurant consultant father, trying on new names and personalities in each town. As she lands in a new spot, she contemplates her predicament:
Sure, it was always jarring up and leaving everything again. But it all came down to how you looked at it. Think earth-shattering, life-ruining change, and you’re done. But cast it as a do-over, a chance to reinvent and begin again, and it’s all good. We were in Lakeview. It was early January. I could be anyone from here.Teens often feel like their identities aren’t quite fixed yet, like they could rip themselves up and start all over again if they wanted to. Honor that and see if you can’t incorporate it thematically.
Next up is teen-mindset-master John Green and his book Paper Towns. In it, an earnest teen boy, Quentin, or Q for short, falls for a hipster named Margo Roth Spiegelman, a teen so disillusioned with her suburban life that she runs away. Being the stand-up (lovesick) guy, Q spends the rest of the book trying to save Margo from herself.
A lot of teens see the world or society and want to change it. Here, Margo speaks about her claustrophobic Florida town:
All those paper people living in their paper houses, burning the future to stay warm. All the paper kids drinking beer some bum bought for them at the paper convenience. Everyone demented with the mania of owning things. All the things paper-thin and paper-frail. And all the people, too. I’ve lived here for eighteen years and I have never once in my life come across anyone who cares about anything that matters.And here’s Q trying to put himself into Margo’s Converse All Stars a little later in the story:
And all at once I knew how Margo Roth Spiegelman felt when she wasn’t being Margo Roth Spiegelman: she felt empty. She felt the unscaleable wall surrounding her.These teens see the world and interpret it intensely. They feel deep longing and pain and love and searching. Understanding these qualities about adolescence will make your literature for these readers richer and deeper.
Sunday, December 2, 2012
NFL Player kills girlfriend then himself. What Going on???
KANSAS CITY, Missouri — Kansas City Chiefs linebacker Jovan Belcher
fatally shot his girlfriend early Saturday, then drove to Arrowhead
Stadium and committed suicide in front of his coach and general manager
after first thanking them for everything they had done for him, police
said.
Authorities did not immediately release a possible motive
for the murder-suicide, which stunned the pro football team and came one
day before a home game against the Carolina Panthers. The National
Football League said the game would go on as scheduled.
Belcher, a 25-year-old native of West Babylon, New York, on Long Island, played college ball at Maine. He had played all four of his NFL seasons for the Chiefs and played in every game each year, including the 11 so far this season.
Before turning the gun on himself, Belcher thanked Chiefs general manager Scott Pioli and coach Romeo Crennel for all they had done for him, police spokesman Darin Snapp said.
Authorities received a call Saturday morning from a woman who said her daughter had been shot multiple times at a residence about five miles (eight kilometers) away from the Arrowhead complex.
"When we arrived, a lady informed us that her daughter had been shot multiple times by her boyfriend, by the daughter's boyfriend," Snapp said. "She identified him as a Chiefs player."
Snapp said a call was then received from the Chiefs' facility.
"The description matched the suspect description from that other address. We kind of knew what we were dealing with," he said. The player was "holding a gun to his head" as he stood in front of the front doors of the practice facility.
"And there were Pioli and Crennel and another coach or employee was standing outside and appeared to be talking to him. It appeared they were talking to the suspect," Snapp said. "The suspect began to walk in the opposite direction of the coaches and the officers and that's when they heard the gunshot. It appears he took his own life."
The coaches told police they never felt in any danger, Snapp said.
"They said the player was actually thanking them for everything they'd done for him," he said. "They were just talking to him and he was thanking them and everything. That's when he walked away and shot himself."
Snapp described the girlfriend as in her early 20s and that she and the player had a child together. He said the woman's mother told police they had recently been arguing.
Arrowhead Stadium has been on lockdown since about 8 a.m.
"We can confirm that there was an incident at Arrowhead earlier this morning," the Chiefs said in a statement. "We are cooperating with authorities in their investigation."
Kansas City is scheduled to host the Carolina Panthers on Sunday. The league has informed the Panthers to travel as scheduled because the game would be played as scheduled.
The season has been a massive disappointment for the Chiefs, who were expected to contend for the AFC West title.
They're just 1-10 and mired in an eight-game losing streak that has been marked by devastating injuries and fan upheaval, with constant calls the past few weeks for Pioli and Crennel to be fired. Things have been so bad this season that Crennel fired himself as defensive coordinator.
The Chiefs have been ravaged by injuries, led the league in turnovers, can't settle on a quarterback and are dealing with a full-fledged fan rebellion. The Twitter account for a fan group known as "Save Our Chiefs" recently surpassed 80,000 followers, about 17,000 more than the announced crowd at a recent game.
Article according to Associated Press
Belcher, a 25-year-old native of West Babylon, New York, on Long Island, played college ball at Maine. He had played all four of his NFL seasons for the Chiefs and played in every game each year, including the 11 so far this season.
Before turning the gun on himself, Belcher thanked Chiefs general manager Scott Pioli and coach Romeo Crennel for all they had done for him, police spokesman Darin Snapp said.
Authorities received a call Saturday morning from a woman who said her daughter had been shot multiple times at a residence about five miles (eight kilometers) away from the Arrowhead complex.
"When we arrived, a lady informed us that her daughter had been shot multiple times by her boyfriend, by the daughter's boyfriend," Snapp said. "She identified him as a Chiefs player."
Snapp said a call was then received from the Chiefs' facility.
"The description matched the suspect description from that other address. We kind of knew what we were dealing with," he said. The player was "holding a gun to his head" as he stood in front of the front doors of the practice facility.
"And there were Pioli and Crennel and another coach or employee was standing outside and appeared to be talking to him. It appeared they were talking to the suspect," Snapp said. "The suspect began to walk in the opposite direction of the coaches and the officers and that's when they heard the gunshot. It appears he took his own life."
The coaches told police they never felt in any danger, Snapp said.
"They said the player was actually thanking them for everything they'd done for him," he said. "They were just talking to him and he was thanking them and everything. That's when he walked away and shot himself."
Snapp described the girlfriend as in her early 20s and that she and the player had a child together. He said the woman's mother told police they had recently been arguing.
Arrowhead Stadium has been on lockdown since about 8 a.m.
"We can confirm that there was an incident at Arrowhead earlier this morning," the Chiefs said in a statement. "We are cooperating with authorities in their investigation."
Kansas City is scheduled to host the Carolina Panthers on Sunday. The league has informed the Panthers to travel as scheduled because the game would be played as scheduled.
The season has been a massive disappointment for the Chiefs, who were expected to contend for the AFC West title.
They're just 1-10 and mired in an eight-game losing streak that has been marked by devastating injuries and fan upheaval, with constant calls the past few weeks for Pioli and Crennel to be fired. Things have been so bad this season that Crennel fired himself as defensive coordinator.
The Chiefs have been ravaged by injuries, led the league in turnovers, can't settle on a quarterback and are dealing with a full-fledged fan rebellion. The Twitter account for a fan group known as "Save Our Chiefs" recently surpassed 80,000 followers, about 17,000 more than the announced crowd at a recent game.
Article according to Associated Press
EVERGREEN UPROOTED (CHAPTER 5 EXCERPT)
“After
Jessica’s murder, Frank Junior became severely depressed. Later he was on antidepressants, prescribed
by the psychiatrist that was treating him, and he was staying at my parents’
house.”
On October
16, 1982, when I was six and a half years old, around the same time Mommy
married Buck, Uncle Frank Junior held my grandparents hostage at gunpoint. It all started early in the morning, when my
grandmother told my Uncle Frank Junior, “Get up and go to work.”
He said,
“No.”
She said,
“Yes you are, you are going to work today.”
He snapped, and
pulled out a pistol on my grandparents. He
demanded they go into the kitchen and kneel down on their knees. Because they moved slowly, he fired...
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Saturday, December 1, 2012
Improving Your Writing Style
IMPROVING YOUR WRITING STYLE
Focus on the whole as well as the parts
Any time you add or revise some words, reread what surrounds them to ensure that everything else still fits. Often, a change in one place will necessitate a change in another. Naturally you must focus on each line as you create it, but as soon as you have the first draft in place, back up a few lines and read through the earlier text again. You will sometimes find that the latest addition doesn’t fit in quite as it should—perhaps it restates a point already made, or doesn’t make a smooth enough transition from what came before.As you form each new sentence, keep going back and rereading it from the start to ensure that all its elements mesh together. As you form each new paragraph, keep rereading it from its first line to see how its sentences fit together: perhaps the topic shifts enough that the paragraph should be broken up, or perhaps a particular word now is repeated too many times within a short space.
Put your work aside for a while and then come back to it
You may be confident that you have polished your words into their final form, only to find that when you look at them a little later, problems jump out: illogical connections, clumsy sentence structures, a strained-sounding tone, subtle grammatical errors. A lapse of time enables you to come back to your work with a more objective eye. A day or more away is ideal, but even a few hours can make a difference.Have someone else look your work over
Any writer, no matter how skilled, can benefit from getting a second opinion, because by definition one is always too close to one’s own work. Given that any writing is ultimately intended for other people’s consumption, it only makes sense to find out how other people perceive it. The individual whose opinion you seek need not be a better writer than you, since the goal is not necessarily to have this person correct or revise what you have done. Rather, it is to provide you with feedback on how your points and your tone are coming across. If your critic doesn’t get your jokes, or finds a character you meant to be funny and sympathetic merely irritating, or can’t follow some instruction because you left out a step you thought would be perfectly obvious to anybody—at least consider the possibility of making changes (and do your best to remain on speaking terms afterward). A professional editor is ideal, but if this is not practical or affordable, select someone whose opinion you respect and who represents your intended readership as nearly as possible.Read your text aloud
This strategy is likeliest to be helpful if your writing is intended for oral presentation, but can be useful for other genres as well. Hearing your own words, as opposed to looking at them, may change your impression of them and expose weaknesses such as pretentious-sounding terms, wooden dialogue, or rambling sentences.
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